Adverbs, let’s look at them and determine what they are and if we really need them.
From the Oxford Dictionary:
noun
Grammar
Let’s start with looking at the real troublemakers among the adverbs, those that answer the question how.
Generally speaking, if a word answers the question how, it is an adverb. If it can have an -ly added to it, place it there. But do you, as an author, really want to use the adverb when you can describe a scene instead? Isn’t using the adverb the easy way out?
Ask yourself this, “If I use an adverb for every ‘how’, would my story not be filled with -ly words?” The answer is yes. The next question, “Should you use a description/show for every ‘how’ instead of using an adverb?” The answer is no. You must find the right moment to use an adverb and the right moment to set the scene, because some ‘how’ moments require a show while others can do with an adverb. And that’s when your craft/writing skill is needed, because it all depends on how well you have already established the character’s traits and mannerisms to be able to use an adverb for example or if you are still building your character. Or still are setting a scene. An adverb is often an easy way out for those who forget they can use more words to show.
Example:
He quickly walked past her nervously rubbing his palms on his trousers.
or:
He walked–almost ran–past her, eyes cast down, rubbing his sweaty palms on his trousers.
In the first sentence there are two adverbs which could have easily been left out to create a more descriptive sentence to present the reader with more of a picture. i.e. you show instead of tell in the second sentence.
His sweaty (adjective to show he is nervous and eliminating the need for that adverb) palms show what you told the readers in the first example.
So where an adverb can cripple your story the adjectives can give it colour and flavour, if used in moderation.
Which leads us to adjectives and when to use them, or how much of them we need.
The first thing we need to know is if that detail which is revealed by the adjective is really necessary for the reader to know now or later on in the story.
Example:
The woman had dark brown, big, almond-shaped eyes.
Do we need to know her eyes are big, or almond-shaped? Does the colour matter? Or is it all just filler?
Another one:
The blood red, frayed velvet curtains framing the stained windows didn’t block out all the light, but still the room darkened enough when I closed them to lure the creature out of the closet.
The adjectives used here show us the house we are in is in kind of a decrepit state.
Ergo, adjectives are very useful, if used when they are needed and not just to add more words to your story. Remember, it is always better to show than tell.
But then again, there are writers who have a flowery, over-descriptive style and get away with it, because they write such great stories we gobble up everything they have ever written.
Who do you think writes stories with an abundance of adjectives and gets away with it? And how do you feel about the use of adverbs?
If you want to discover more about the rules concerning adverbs click here and read up on the matter.
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A useful run down of adverb and adjective usage.
Thanks. 🙂 I’m glad to hear my words actually help others.
Good job, now if I could just convince people in my writers group! I try.
Keep at it and steer them toward reading articles about it, and have them really reading good books. They’ll see there is a time and place for those words and that they should be aware of when to use them and when not.
It is much too easy, after all, to overwrite a book.
Tell me about it, William. My first drafts are often to descriptive and filled with details that bring nothing to the story but filling and not flesh.
I avidly read posts like this and I enjoyed this one greatly.
Thanks you. 🙂 I am not the Grammar nazi, but I do enjoy sharing snippets like these. Have you read the follow-up article on my site too?
Other adverbs on my hit list: quite, very, and well. My tenth grade composition teacher went on a tirade once about how silly it is to use the “very” and her reaction has stuck with me ever since.
How write she was, Jeri! 🙂
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Thanks for stopping by and advising people to ‘listen’ to my words. 🙂
I enjoyed your article! Not only was it full of great information (we all need a kick in the pants sometimes), I found myself smiling at your added gifs! It was a lot of fun to read and I appreciated the examples you provided. Keep it up!
Thank you Chrestin. I’m not exactly the real Grammar Nazi 🙂 but writing articles like these are fun to do and I’m glad they are of some help to my fellow authors.